Writing Exercise #11

During the peer-review process, I recognized many interesting points. First, I was so confused about the audience of the assay who is in bio-health science but not an expert in microbiology. English isn’t my native language, and I don’t know whether some words that I don’t understand other student know them. The difference is the language difference. Thus, I tried to image and pretend myself as a student who was born in U.S. before I start the process. Second, I felt so interested in reading and critiquing other students’ essays. I found the different writing styles between two essays such as the way the organize their essays and the language they use and whether they prepare and take the time to write their essays. I might know how passionate the author put into their essay. I followed the rubrics and critique the essays. I usually ask myself and search information before I write down my responses. Somehow, I try to provide the authors the clear feedbacks and not unnecessary ideas so they can have better ideas to revise their essays. I used

I also compared the essays I do peer-review and my own essay to think of how to revise my final essay. There are differences among essays, and I think that doing peer-review for other students’ essays help me to know clearly rubrics and ideas how other student work on their essays in order to improve my ideas in my essay. I found out that I lack some points based on the rubrics, so I definitely need to work on that. Also, from the essays, I learn the character of this essay based on a controversial topic. One essay is so simple and doesn’t have the controversial topic. Another essay, the student works well on supporting the thesis but not against the thesis. So I think that I should try to make a balance between pros/cons paragraph. This essay has a controversial topic which student needs to have an overview of both sides of a topic then make their own stance. If the pros are so strong and long paragraphs, and the cons are so weak and short paragraph, then the essay seems not controversial. It’s because the students don’t need to convince them in order to make a stance. Thus, after the peer review process, I carefully check my topic to make sure its controversy.  Moreover, I also learn about the tone and language. As the audience in bio health science but not an expert in microbiology, when I read the essays, I thought of my essay if I was the audience. Then I had many ideas how to change my language to be more suitable for the audience.