My Brand: As a potential employee, my hope is to create a strong and lasting first impression. I am who ensures I introduce myself to everyone in the room with a firm handshake and eye contact. Nothing bothers me more than when people give lousy handshakes or don’t introduce themselves. Some of my strengths include having an eagerness to learn, a strong work ethic, being organized, task-driven, and detail-oriented. These can be conveyed through my past job experiences as well as my current educational accomplishments. Some of my weaknesses, however, include being a perfectionist and over-thinking/analyzing simple things. I am unique in that none of my past work is in the same field. I have a variety of experiences so I can quickly adapt to different situations with my many skills and abilities.
Situation Wanted Ad: My name is Delani West and I am a senior at Oregon State University (OSU) finishing up my studies in management and finance. I am looking for an internship or full-time employment opportunity in an HR position. There is my third (and final) year at OSU. I have successfully completed several classes in both management and finance, but would like to focus on HR because it’s intriguing to me and I believe both focuses of mine can be applied here. My last job was a management internship that allowed me to learn how I can apply myself as a leader. I currently work as a tutor/TA for the statistics department, where I spend much of my time assisting students with their homework and projects. This proves to be a great leadership position, as I am constantly adjusting and adapting to new situations. I am always looking for ways to build and improve myself, but I am just as concerned, if not more, about bettering the people and company around me. I am confident that my past work experiences combined with my current education have prepared me for a role in HR. I am eager for an opportunity to apply my knowledge and skills, while also learning along the way. If interested, you can reach me at westde@oregonstate.edu to further discuss. I look forward to hearing from you.
5 replies on “Critiquing a Recruitment Ad”
Hi Delani, Your post is laid out in a really neat and organized fashion. I like how you mentioned that you shake peoples hands and look them in the eyes when you first meet them. This is an overlooked thing in writing, however, it is an essential skill to have. Lastly, I like how you tied in your previous roles as a tutor and an intern and that you want to be in HR. Having a broad experience in many fields will give you an advantage as a future HR manager. Nice job!
Delani,
I really appreciated your post and think you bring ups some really good talking points. I could not agree more that introducing one’s self and shaking everyone’s hand is one of the most important things in an interview. I really enjoyed learning more about your strengths and weaknesses and some of the things you believe are important in a first impression. In the second paragraph, I really enjoy how you have tied your tutor/TA position to your argument for being hired as an HR employee. Overall, really well done and I look forward to your next post!
Hello!
Great post this week. I think you do a great job explaining your strengths and weaknesses in your post. I had a difficult time writing my brand because I have never thought of it in that way before. One of my biggest weaknesses is my writing and I really do want it to become better. I have never been a fan of writing and have walkways struggled with reading and writing my whole life. It is a very important field to be good at because you will always have to use it in the future.
I agree with your point of making a strong and lasting first impression. Someone may be overqualified for a job but if they come into an interview and don’t start off strong to get the employer to like them then it could become a lot more difficult to get the position you want especially if there is a fairly large candidate field. Having a variety of work experience can definitely be very helpful as long as you make that known because like you said it can show that you can adapt to new surroundings well and any employer should love to see that.
Your situation wanted ad is very strong. You touch on all the important factors that a company will want to see and don’t waste any time getting straight to your point. I think this would be a very effective ad.
Delani,
I think your post is very finished and seems like you spent a lot of time on it. I think your tone in your writing seems very fitting for the situation, it is informal to an extent while still being professional. I think you do a good job of tying your interests, skills, and past work experience together to help convey your brand to employers.
Best, Tyler